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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. what are the advantages and disadvantages

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Among
university
students
 is become ever more popular to spend part of the studies in another country, hosted by other institutions.
Although
 it can be one of the best
experience
 a student can ever
had
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, it is not always certain that going
to
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abroad is more enriching than staying at the
home
university
.
This
 essay will argue both advantages and disadvantages
about
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 having an exchange
experience
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university
students
. European study projects,
such
 as the Erasmus, are meant to let young
students
 from universities
to
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spent part of their
studiesin
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studies in
an
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 hosting institution, for a period between 5 to 12 months.
This
 habit is becoming more popular with years and, as main feedback received, is an enriching
experience
 where
students
 have the chance
for
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 both meeting people from different cultural and social extractions
,
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 and
experience
new
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 type of educations. Once came back
at
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 the
home
 institution, the
students
 seem to have stronger determination in studying and, at the same time, richer in personal knowledge.
On the other hand
, spending some time abroad
,
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 may turn into a not positive
experience
. Unfortunately, It can
happens
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 that the hosting institution does not provide courses as good as the
home
university
 and
therefore
 people return from the
experience
 with less
knownledge
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knowledge
 than when they left.
Also
, if not supported by
schoolarships
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scholarships
scholarship
, the
experience
 of going abroad can be quite expensive and more costly compared to studying at the
home
university
. In conclusion, funding projects
such
 as Erasmus
,
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 can be wonderful and enriching experiences that encourage
students
 in their studies. Whilst acknowledging that there are drawbacks
such
 as less valuable lessons or very expensive experiences
,
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 if they are not funded.
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