Some people think that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children’s development than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Games
plays
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play
very
crucial role in every person life .there are many different types of Add an article
a very
games
such
as indoor and outdoor games
.Nowadays, mostly children plays
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play
computer
games
rather than outdoor games
.however
many people think that outside games
are beneficial for the children’s growth and development. So I am agree
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agree
upto
Correct your spelling
up to
to
great
extent.
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a great
To begin
with, there are lots of benefits if children’s play outdoor games
like cricket,volleyball and many more. First
of all
it will develop their personality Add a comma
,all
for example
,
if they will play that kind of Remove the comma
apply
games
in which force needed than it will burn their body fat as well as make them healthy and fit.Secondly
, it will also
enhance their qualities like leadership,honesty and unity in between whole
team because outside Change the article
the whole
games
are played among many people which is helpful for them to know each other especially one get chance to lead team
as well as it will Add an article
the team
a team
also
promote unity between all players.
On the other hand
, computer
games
are also
useful for sometime
. Replace the word
some time
For instance
, In covid 19 people are not allowed to come outside from
their home.Verify preposition usage
of
however
,they can’t even go to park
for exercise Add an article
the park
a park
although
they pass their time through
playing Verify preposition usage
by
computer
games
.
To conclude, children’s should use computer
for their benefit Add an article
the computer
a computer
not
for Add the comma(s)
,not
games
means, they can use it for study and assignment acitivits
which are given by school or college.Correct your spelling
activities
activity
However
they should play more outdoor Add a comma
,However
games
rather than indoor games
because it will also
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