Some people think that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children’s development than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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plays

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very

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crucial role in every person life .there are many different types of

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such

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as indoor and outdoor

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.Nowadays, mostly children

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computer

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games

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rather than outdoor

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however

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many people think that outside

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are beneficial for the children’s growth and development. So I

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upto

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extent.

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with, there are lots of benefits if children’s play outdoor

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like cricket,volleyball and many more.

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it will develop their personality

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if they will play that kind of

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in which force needed than it will burn their body fat as well as make them healthy and fit.

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, it will

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enhance their qualities like leadership,honesty and unity in between

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team because outside

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are played among many people which is helpful for them to know each other especially one get chance to lead

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as well as it will

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promote unity between all players.

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computer

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games

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useful for

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some time

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, In covid 19 people are not allowed to come outside

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their home.

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,they can’t even go to

park

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for exercise

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they pass their time

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playing

computer

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games

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. To conclude, children’s should use

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computer

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the computer

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for their benefit

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for

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means, they can use it for study and assignment

acitivits

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activities

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which are given by school or college.

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However

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they should play more outdoor

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rather than indoor

games

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enhance their practical knowledge and increase sports spirit

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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250 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Physical development
Overall health
Coordination
Foster
Social skills
Teamwork
Mental well-being
Creativity
Exploration
Strategic thinking
Problem-solving
Hand-eye coordination
Sedentary lifestyles
Social isolation
Moderation
Balanced approach
Detract
Obesity
Poor posture

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