Some people think that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children’s development than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Games

plays

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very

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crucial role in every person life .there are many different types of

games

such

as indoor and outdoor

games

.Nowadays, mostly children

plays

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computer

games

rather than outdoor

games

.

however

many people think that outside

games

are beneficial for the children’s growth and development. So I

am agree

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upto

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up to

to

great

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extent.

To begin

with, there are lots of benefits if children’s play outdoor

games

like cricket,volleyball and many more.

First

of

all

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it will develop their personality

for example

,

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if they will play that kind of

games

in which force needed than it will burn their body fat as well as make them healthy and fit.

Secondly

, it will

also

enhance their qualities like leadership,honesty and unity in between

whole

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team because outside

games

are played among many people which is helpful for them to know each other especially one get chance to lead

team

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as well as it will

also

promote unity between all players.

On the other hand

,

computer

games

are

also

useful for

sometime

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.

For instance

, In covid 19 people are not allowed to come outside

from

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their home.

however

,they can’t even go to

park

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the park

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for exercise

although

they pass their time

through

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playing

computer

games

. To conclude, children’s should use

computer

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the computer

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for their benefit

not

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for

games

means, they can use it for study and assignment

acitivits

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activities

activity

which are given by school or college.

However

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they should play more outdoor

games

rather than indoor

games

because it will

also

enhance their practical knowledge and increase sports spirit