Some people think that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children’s development than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Games
plays
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very
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crucial role in every person life .there are many different types of
games
such
as indoor and outdoor
games
.Nowadays, mostly children
plays
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computer
games
rather than outdoor
games
.
however
many people think that outside
games
are beneficial for the children’s growth and development. So I
am agree
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upto
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up to
to
great
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extent.
To begin
with, there are lots of benefits if children’s play outdoor
games
like cricket,volleyball and many more.
First
of
all
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it will develop their personality
for example
,
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if they will play that kind of
games
in which force needed than it will burn their body fat as well as make them healthy and fit.
Secondly
, it will
also
enhance their qualities like leadership,honesty and unity in between
whole
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team because outside
games
are played among many people which is helpful for them to know each other especially one get chance to lead
team
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the team
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as well as it will
also
promote unity between all players.
On the other hand
,
computer
games
are
also
useful for
sometime
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.
For instance
, In covid 19 people are not allowed to come outside
from
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their home.
however
,they can’t even go to
park
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the park
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for exercise
although
they pass their time
through
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playing
computer
games
. To conclude, children’s should use
computer
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the computer
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for their benefit
not
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for
games
means, they can use it for study and assignment
acitivits
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activities
activity
which are given by school or college.
However
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they should play more outdoor
games
rather than indoor
games
because it will
also
enhance their practical knowledge and increase sports spirit
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical development
  • Overall health
  • Coordination
  • Foster
  • Social skills
  • Teamwork
  • Mental well-being
  • Creativity
  • Exploration
  • Strategic thinking
  • Problem-solving
  • Hand-eye coordination
  • Sedentary lifestyles
  • Social isolation
  • Moderation
  • Balanced approach
  • Detract
  • Obesity
  • Poor posture
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