Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Adolescence is believed by a growing number of
people
to be the happiest period for most people
during their lifetime.Others ,however
,argue that people
live a happier life in their adulthood even though they have more responsibilities.
On the one hand,a group of people
think most the teenagers live a happier life in comparison with other periods in their lives
because in that period they are neither too young to be dependent on other people
nor old enough to undertake responsibilities.In other words
, it is the only time
that people
could only think about themselves and spend enough time
on leisure activities without being concerned about making money, meeting their basic necessities and other responsibilities related to adulthood. Take an adolescent as an example, he can independently spend his time
on
dating his friends and have fun with them while no one expects him to contribute to any serious activities ,Change preposition
apply
such
as cooking and paying bills.
On the other hand
,it said by some others that those who are adults can be more content with their lives
in spite of greater duties they have since they are not affected by the rush of hormones which are released in teenagers’ bodies. To clarify more, human aged between 12 and 18 are undertaken serious changes ranging from mental changes and physical ones ,which can have adverse
impact on their sense of satisfaction and happiness in life.Add an article
an adverse
In addition
,as people
grow older,they can be more experienced and know themselves better which can lead them to find the exact definition of happiness.In the
other word,older Remove the article
apply
people
can find or create ways in which they are able to live a happier
Correct the article-noun agreement
a happier life
happier lives
lives
by developing their knowledge about lives
and Add a pronoun
their lives
also
themselves.
In conclusion,I belive
that Correct your spelling
believe
although
adolescence is a period of time
in which teenagers do not need to take part in carrying out any difficult tasks, adulthood is when people
can experience much more amount of happiness due to maturity and a great deal of knowledge and experience that people
have.Submitted by suna.habibi on
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