air travel can only benefit the richest people in the world. The ordinary people can get no advantage with the development of air travel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Part of the
population
believes that some methods of
transportation
,
such
as
air
travelling, only
benefit
wealth
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people
; while others think that the evolution of
air
travel
sector
could result in benefits for regular
people
.
This
essay will discuss both perspectives and explain why I agree that the development of
air
travelling can
benefit
the
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ordinary
people
.
To begin
with,
people
who think that
air
travelling only benefits the rich ones, defend that the whole slew of the
population
cannot afford the cost of
air
travelling.
Therefore
, no matter how many improvements are made in
this
method of
transportation
, it would never affect and reflect
in
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benefits for the majority of
people
.
For instance
, some research conducted by the National
Travel
Agency in Brazil showed that only fifteen per cent of the
brazillian
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population
have financial conditions to regularly use planes as transport.
Nevertheless
, ordinary
people
are already benefited
with
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aerial service of
transportation
.
Although
they do not fly in the same proportion as rich
people
do, they definitely use
air
travel
to enjoy
ocasional
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travellings and attend
emergencial
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situations.
Furthermore
, the growth of
aerial
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sector
and constant
investiments
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investments
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in the
aiport
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infrastructure have been attracting new companies to start exploring businesses opportunities.
Therefore
,
this
phenomenon can increase the competition in
this
sector
and,
consequently
, stimulate companies to offer more affordable services to the whole
population
. These changes can affect positively the prices of flying tickets and attract more ordinary
people
to use
this
method of
transportation
more frequently. To conclude,
although
some
people
believe that the development of
air
travel
can only
benefit
rich
people
, I totally agree that developments in
this
sector
can affect positively the prices of
air
tickets,
hence
, it will
benefit
middle and poor classes
aswell
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