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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

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Some people harbour a belief that how many choice
students
 should select to
study
 at the university
instead
 they are forced to
study
 certain
courses
 about science or
technology
, while others hold the reverse viewpoint. From my perspective, it is a controversial issue which deserves an in-depth discussion.
To begin
 with, one of the main argument in its favour is that university
students
 should be free to choose their prefered areas of
study
. Society will benefit more if our
students
 ignite the passion for learning which they are interested in.
Furthermore
, nobody can predict that which area of
study
 will be most useful to society in the future and
also
 it may be that employers value the creative thinking skills
instead
 of technical skills; if
this
 were the case, we would need to learn the knowledge of art, history and philosophy than science and
technology
.
On the other hand
, some people occasionally realize the fact that the universities should only provide the key subjects
courses
 which will be useful in the future. They may assert university
courses
such
 as medicine, computer science, engineering and information of
technology
 rather than some art degrees. It is true that these certain
courses
 will offer more job opportunities, career progression, better salaries and
also
 improve the quality of life for
students
.
Besides
 the aforementioned, governments can ensure to bridge the gap between
this
 professional knowledge and human society
also
 lead to the development of new
technology
 and economic growth. In conclusion, despite the fact that universities focus only on certain subjects may bring the large benefit for
students
' future;
however
, I personally prefer the current system for
students
 who can select what they want to learn.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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