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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 on the world wide web .
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internet
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academic
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the academic
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 sector;because,kids can learn more from
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.
Although
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it saves precious time and
study
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the internet
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is
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 not much expensive . At the onset,
internet
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 has proved as a boon for
man kind
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 because
,
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it helps in every aspect
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with the aid of modern
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gadgets
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of
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,
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 can learn from tutors because,nowadays,most of the international mentor post
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 video on youtube which is helpful for kids academic section Furtherrevealsthat,
internet
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the internet
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 should not be banned in educational sector because,
internet
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the internet
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 saves precious time
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student
 during the online
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for example
:during the corona pandemic
student
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 restart their
study
 with the help of modern
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gadgets
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Last
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internet
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the internet
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 is not much expensive .So most of the learners can easily afford it .
Internet
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internet
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the internet
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 has proved as a blessing for mankind because in Corona pandemic
internet
 has helpful for
student
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also
 save both time and money of learners and learning can easily take classes from
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