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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 on the world wide web .
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 is convenient it has ample negative effect and its use for
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 purpose should be banned.But,I believe that
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it saves precious time and
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the internet
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 not much expensive . At the onset,
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internet
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 has proved as a boon for
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 because
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it helps in every aspect
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with the aid of modern
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gadgets
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of
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 one question.
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the student
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 can learn from tutors because,nowadays,most of the international mentor post
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a various
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 video on youtube which is helpful for kids academic section Furtherrevealsthat,
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internet
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the internet
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 should not be banned in educational sector because,
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internet
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the internet
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 saves precious time
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student
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 during the online
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:during the corona pandemic
student
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 restart their
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 with the help of modern
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gadgets
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study
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a study
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internet
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the internet
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 is not much expensive .So most of the learners can easily afford it .
Internet
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 is
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oder
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you tube
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 ,google To conclude ,
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internet
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 has proved as a blessing for mankind because in Corona pandemic
internet
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 has helpful for
student
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 auto world-wide-web
also
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an International
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 mentor in free of cost in order to get fresh knowledge from
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a foreign
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 teacher
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  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
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  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
  • discerning
  • credible sources
  • incorporation
  • engagement
  • adaptivity
  • personalized learning
  • innovative
  • pedagogy
  • digital age
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