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People are consuming more and more sugar-based drinks. Why? What can be done to reduce sugary drink consumption?

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It is true that the consumption of
drinks
 with added sugar is increasing globally, even in less developed countries. While a number of factors explain
this
 trend, some countries have taken measures to reduce the intake of sweetened
drinks
. Heavy marketing is the principal reason why the consumption of sugar-based
drinks
 has increased rapidly.
This
 trend is of concern to the World
Health
 Organisation because it carries
health
 risks, including life-threatening conditions
such
 as diabetes, cardiovascular diseases and certain types of cancer. The soft-
drinks
 manufacturers advertise their products to a target audience of young children and adolescents.
This
 strategy encourages youngsters to form the lifetime habit of buying these
drinks
, as they are soon addicted to the high sugar content. They put on weight, are prone to obesity and find it difficult to keep their teeth healthy. There are three measures that would be effective in tackling the rise in the popularity of sugary
drinks
.
Firstly
, governments should raise taxes on the sales of soft
drinks
.
This
 has been done in France,
for example
, and could be implemented by other countries, too.
Secondly
, vending machines must be removed from public places, discouraging the consumption of sugary
drinks
 in schools, bus stations, cinemas and hospitals.
Finally
,
health
 awareness campaigns on TV and the internet could help in combatting the promotion of soft
drinks
 by marketing agencies, including the compulsory addition of
health
 warnings on labels, as in the case of tobacco products. In conclusion,
although
 the promotion of soft
drinks
 has resulted in increased sales, effective steps can be taken to reverse
this
 trend.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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