Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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, the consumption of

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are

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reflecting the increase of power of advertising but not the demand

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need of society in which they are sold. I partly agree with

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statement because

people

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are becoming unconscious about what they want to buy. On one hand, the essential product is

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choice in other options.

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of all, to have a

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convenient

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good

produts

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products

are required to get a happy life.

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the

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manager always needs a clean suit for the meeting or the house is needed to decorate

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ceremony day. The

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, the necessary

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firts

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first

helpness

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to the

consumer

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because they usually see the benefit of the product when they extremely need it.

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some

people

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do not see all of the qualities of

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so they easily

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forged

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by the

consumer

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, a lot of

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about the function of

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when they buy it.

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, many

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just want to buy

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goods

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after watching the advertisement of these.

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those

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was

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bought

beacasue

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because

they have a

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beautiful

outlook, even some

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are useless for their life.

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, the advertising company always have a good strategy for their

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those are

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to access the

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not only on the TV

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and the social media and the billboards. In conclusion, recently

people

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just buy

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when found that have a good look or

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poor understanding

about

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goods

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. The media company will take these advantages to ear more money from the

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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265 words

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lifestyle aspirations
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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

It is common that in many companies people from different ages work together in a same team. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantges?

Many social media accounts are fake What problems does ths cause? What Solatons can you suget?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?