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Living in a country where you gave to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates information about the proportion of British citizen between 18 and 65 and above, providing money to
charity
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 over the period from 1990 and 2010. It is clear from the graph that there was a decline in numbers of
charity
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, in the younger and middle age
group
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 over the years.
However
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, the older
group
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 showed some more interest in
charity
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 in the final
year
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. During the
first
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year
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, the
group
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 between 18-25 started at approximately 16%, which was more than double the rate of the
last
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year
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.
Subsequently
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,
this
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 increased rapidly to more than 30% in 26-35.
Then
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, it reached a peak of just over 40% in the middle age
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.
Moreover
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, the percentage fall steadily to 35% and in the seniors in dropped slightly to around 32%. In the
last
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year
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, the
charity
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 levels began really low, with a number of just about 6%.
Although
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, it climbed up gradually to 35% in 36-50.
Then
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, it reached almost a hight of 40%.
Finally
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, it dropped down to 35% in the 65 plussers.
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