Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things. What is your opinion?

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The research of planets is very costly and the funds should be consumed allocated on other significant activities. In my opinion, Space Technology is crucial but there are other relevant matters
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that should be given priority like poverty, education, hospitality and
provision
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of food. The following paragraphs will justify my opinion with some examples. There are numerous issues associated with
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space technology.
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, Space technology
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is a costly affair and consumes too much revenue. It requires huge infrastructure
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such
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as
super computer
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, telescope, satellites, rockets etc.
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, the training of staff requires lots of efforts for
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purpose.
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, the missions planned for the research purpose have a possibility of failure.
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, it leads to the consumption of too many resources and is a constant burden on the finances of a country.
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, the amount spent in
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the UK
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for
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studies is about
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quarter of the whole income. While the other relevant matters like, in many
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there are people who are living below the poverty line and the families who cannot feed three meals a day to their young ones.
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areas demand
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monetary attention.
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, the situation gets more serious (grave) when the government
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of making policies for the betterment of mankind (humanity), spend too much on the uplift of engineering science related to stars and planets. To conclude, I believe that a line should be drawn between the essential and non-essential issues
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so that the suffering of the poor and needy can be reduced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exorbitant
  • myriad
  • pressing issues
  • allocated
  • advances
  • direct results
  • pave the way
  • uninhabitable
  • inspirational aspects
  • fuels innovation
  • shared goal
  • intellectual capital
  • budget overruns
  • tangible benefits
  • rationale
  • dedicating
  • returns on investment
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