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Band 3

Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree?

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in flourish globe , technology is more
powerfull
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powerful
 than human. it is very
usefull
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useful
 and same time it is overloaded in human life.
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computer
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the computer
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is always prefer
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 more
praority
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priority
 than
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library
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a library
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 . in
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 technology world , totally waste of money
in
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library
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 maintaining.
i
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shall put forth my arguments to support my views. The
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 and foremost merits anywhere and anytime we could
use
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computer
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 for anythings
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 as articles and read books or story
extcra
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extra
.
for
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instance
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 we
have
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 go somewhere and we need
do
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 some write
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vertical
 than we can open
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computer
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the computer
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 and search online .
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 ,we get
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myriad
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secondly
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, we have no anytime limit we can utilize what
aver
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 we want .
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moreover
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 we are no needed for any kind of cards .
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example
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 if we go
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 time
library
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 we incumbent have
library
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 card membership.
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, some demerits over here , if any person
have
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 eye problem like blindness they could not
use
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 they would only options
library
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 blind from
innate
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 that person could not
use
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computer
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a computer
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 but they will
use
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library
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the library
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. To put it in a
nutshall
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nutshell
,
i
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 pen down saying that
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library
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 is not everywhere so
goverment
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government
 should stop wasting money on
library
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 maintaining .
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government
goverment
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 should spend more money on technology than
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blindness
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
  • distracted environment
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