Governments and big companies should work together to reverse environmental damage, rather than making individuals responsible for that. To what extent do

Over the past ,decades the environment has been enduring damage brought by human activities.
However
, some people argue that it is not the duty of the citizens to preserve
nature
, rather it is the responsibility of the governments and large corporations to bring healing to the natural wonders. In my opinion, I partially disagree with
this
statement because I believe that everyone should take part in
this
endeavor
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. It is the responsibility of each individual to preserve the
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gift of
nature
. There is only one planet and a single contribution could mean so much. For an instance, if the entire population of the world decides to cut its utilization of single-use plastic,
then
there would be lesser wastes that pollute the ocean.
This
could create a chain of reactions, and by doing so the fishes would thrive. To elaborate, fishing villages would benefit from
such
an event because their ventures on the natural resources will yield a higher and healthier catch.
Consequently
, the consumers will
also
nejoy
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enjoy
a meal free from toxins.
Moroever
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Moreover
, there are
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various company that greatly impacts the environment and some of their work creates permanent destruction to the forest and bodies of water.
That is
why the government should
also
regulate the scope of business of these companies. There should be a regulation made because even if the citizens of a country are active when it comes to preserving the nation's natural resources, their sacrifices would be in vain
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, there
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been multiple tree planting activities in the city of Naga;
however
, the local cement factory greatly exploited the hills. Their exploitation
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brought significant damage to the natural flora and during a recent
typhoon
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a destructive landslide occurred. The said calamity caused hundreds of death.
That is
why everyone should work hand in hand when it comes to reversing and preserving mother
nature
. To infer, people depend on
nature
and it is everyone's duty to preserve it.
Thus
, if the burden of reversing environmental damage is given to only one or two entity
then
calamity would soon strike and claim lives.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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