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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT HOBBIES NEED TO BE DIFFICULT TO BE ENJOYABLE. TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

#people #hobbies
Nowadays, more and more
people
 think that leisure pursuits are required to be challenging and difficult. While some
people
 agree with the statement, I personally disagree with it because
people
 should choose their hobby based on their situations and interest. On the one hand, many
people
 find it more enjoyable when they do
activities
 that are relaxed. Easy hobbies might be considered
as
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boring, but others feel that they are happy and satisfied.
For instance
, swimming
have
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 been my forte since I was 10 years old.
This
 hobby requires very little equipment and easy to learn. In
a
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sweltering weather, taking a dip is not only improve my physically, but
also
 a satisfying activity
which
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 helps me to feel relaxed after
stressful
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 time at school.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that everybody would have their own different interest and passion. Some
people
 only feel excited when they do arduous
activities
.
For example
, playing
piano
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 is a pastime that
are
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 sophisticated and difficult. In my case, it took me more than five years to conquer
this
 field. At
the
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first
time
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 it requires a lot of efforts and sometimes I feel like giving up, but now I enjoy it much more than I did when I started. I believe that many leisure
activities
 would more enjoyable when we reach a higher level of knowledge
,
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 because the feeling of achievement is great. In conclusion, while some
people
are gravitate
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 towards to do difficult
activities
, I would argue that simple hobbies
also
 be fun and relaxed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unique challenge
  • personal growth
  • mastery
  • accomplishment
  • demanding
  • thrill of achievement
  • pastimes
  • fostering
  • sense of community
  • mindfulness
  • stress relief
  • mental break
  • daily stressors
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