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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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There is
section
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a section
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 of people, who think apartment living is beneficial
although
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 living in
house
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the house
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 is still
preferred
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the preferred
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 choice to live by another section of
population
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the population
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. Though staying in a house provides complete independence and privacy to individuals, but it has drawbacks as people don’t feel part of
community
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the community
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 and they get
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detach
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 from society in my
view point
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viewpoint
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. Admittedly, there are few positive aspects of living in
house
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.
Firstly
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, complete privacy and independence from neighbours and their visitors as there is no interference by them in your life.
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, when I moved to Mumbai from Jaipur, my
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next door
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 neighbours would constantly try to find about my whereabouts and would force start unnecessary conversations which used to be annoying.
Secondly
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, independent homes
gives
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 you space to grow your own mini garden where you can grow plants and vegetables easily
on
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 your own backyard.
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In fact
, as per TOI’s property edition weekly page, there is almost
25
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% rise in
mini
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the mini
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 garden with organic farming of vegetables in the lawns of independent
houses
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Although
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, I feel living in
apartment
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an apartment
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 is beneficial to
greater
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a greater
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 extent as compared to
houses
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 because it gives
comfort
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the comfort
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 of security and belongingness in society. As per
population
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the population
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 census report of
Government
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the Government
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 of India, it was highlighted that as
nuclear
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a nuclear
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 family concept and independent living has increased in
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last
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the last
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 one decade more than 30%
people
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of people
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 are suffering from
emotional
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the emotional
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 trauma of not part of
community
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the community
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. Another reason is
cost
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the cost
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 of living in independent
houses
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 are enormous as there is high
maintainance
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maintenance
 of
such
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 property which falls on
individual
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 owner completely. As per India’s largest home loan financing
company
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 HDFC Bank expenses incurred by those staying in apartments are 65% lesser compared to private
houses
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 as cost get shared among each
tenants
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tenant
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. To conclude, in my opinion too living in
apartment
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an apartment
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 is more advantageous as it reduces financial burden and builds community living as compared to those preferring to stay in
houses
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 who live secluded life from society.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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