Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other type of job should be highly paid?
Across professions, celebrities are
highest
paid professionals, which many people think is too much for their job. WhileCorrect article usage
the highest
,
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also
earn high
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a high
income
but it doesn’t mean entertainers should have lower pay.
On the one hand, lifestyle
of these stars look Add an article
the lifestyle
a lifestyle
entincing
and full of pleasures but Correct your spelling
enticing
majority
fails to understand the reality behind the scenes. Correct article usage
the majority
To begin
with, these celebs,
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be constantly train
for tremendous hours each day to hone their skills, which Change the verb form
be constantly trained
be constantly training
then
helps them to deliver impactful performance and enthral audience
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the audience
an audience
For example
, Sachin Tendulkar’s 226 runs in India – Australia test series was attained after practicsing
14 hours every day. Correct your spelling
practising
Furthermore
, these celebrity icons not only generate income
for themselves but also
for other allied profession
directly or indirectly, Change the wording
another allied profession
other allied professions
thus
they are employee generators too. As per, India’s 2021 Financial budget, these entertainers contributed to 10% of employment generation and 2% of total GDP.
On the other hand
, there are many other professions such
as teachers, front line workers and police personnel who still haven’t got their right dues in terms of income
and are still part of lower
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lower-income
income
group, they play immense
role in shaping and Add an article
an immense
safe guarding
the future of our country by providing self-less services. Correct your spelling
safeguarding
Additionally
, they also
help in maintaining social
balance and ethical values of Correct article usage
the social
country
by imparting knowledge in society. Add an article
the country
For instance
, if it weren’t for front line workers, Covid cases in India would have been 80 million by now but they worked hard to sanitize entire
nation.
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the entire
opinion
while celebrities earning Add the comma(s)
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high
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a high
income
is absolutely alright
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all right
uplift
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the uplift
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level of Add an article
the income
other job role
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another job role
other job roles
such
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