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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#growth #shops #towns #cities
Last
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 decade has seen
boom
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a boom
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 in online shopping thanks to
internet
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the internet
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 revolution and
expansion
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the expansion
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 of
E-commerce
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the E-commerce
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 sector which not only delivered goods at the doorsteps but
also
 provided
variety
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a variety
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 of
options
 to select from.
This
 has led to
big
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time
 shift in the way people
nowdays
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nowadays
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 shop and as per the trends published by Times Lifestyle publications physical
foot falls
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footfalls
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 in
stores
 have reduced by 50% in cities and 35% in towns; which will eventually
led
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lead
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 to
closure
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the closure
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 of shops in
next
 2-3 decades as per the article and in my opinion I agree with the
view point
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viewpoint
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 of closure of
physical
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the physical
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 store in coming future. I would like to highlight the reasons for my views and
convienence
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convenience
 is the most important factor here, as online shopping has enabled consumers to shop for anything and everything across the world just through their mobile phones or laptops with just
few
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a few
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 clicks and get the goods delivered right in your home.
This
 has reduced physical and geographical boundaries
for example
 one can order real Belgium chocolates from Natures Basket which wouldn’t be available in local
stores
 of Mumbai. Another reason which supports the viewpoint is customers are catered to experience and choose from
variety
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a variety
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 of
options
 that are shown to them online compared to physical
stores
, there are numerous
options
 in term of designs, colour and size as per the requirement of shoppers. The same is supported by research
publish
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published
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 in Forbes lifestyle that shopping portals like Amazon or Alibaba
provides
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provide
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 minimum
30
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of 30
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options
 for each type of style to choose from giving more variety to shop. Digital shopping saves
lot
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a lot
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 of
time
 is another major reason
as to
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apply
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why people
has
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have
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 shifted to
new
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a new
the new
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 way of buying goods as they get to save on an average of 2 to 3 hours of travel and payment
time
 at physical
stores
 as per
study
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a study
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 conducted
New
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by New
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 York Times and they could now do other extra activities in the
time
 saved.
Lastly
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 the spurt in digital shopping is because of attractive discounts and
cashbacks
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cashback
 by the companies especially during festivals
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, for example,
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 Amazon had 10 billion dollar sales during Diwali in India due to its attractive discounts.
Hence
 because of
above
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the above
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 key
reasons
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,reasons
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 I agree with the thought that shops in towns and cities will lead to closure due to
increase
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the increase
an increase
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 in online shopping.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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