In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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and advancement in
discovery
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the discovery
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of
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digital technology and internet connectivity speed along with
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devices
has
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made
plethora
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of
world wide
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worldwide
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product and services at the fingertips of
people
across
world
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the world
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.
This
has led to ease of any kind of transitions
such
as
payments
or fund transfer easy and real quick time from the comfort of your home and couch minus the difficulty of going all the way
upto
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up to
merchants or vendors place to do
payments
.
Hence
this
digital advancement is more beneficial to
people
which helps them simplify their
payment
through mobile phone. I would like to list down
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advantages of using these
payment
apps
on
mobile
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a mobile
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phone.
Convienece
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Convenience
is of the main benefits of
these mode
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these modes
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of
payments
as
these device
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this device
these devices
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can be easily downloaded and stored in cellphone and requires hardly any huge storage space and
also
can
be access
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be accessed
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from anywhere in the world with
internet
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an internet
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connection. It allows
users
to pay
bills
ant any times of
day
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the day
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and
also
with
option
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the option
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of instructing the app to do auto deduction once
bill
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the bill
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is generated which saves
lot
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a lot
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of time at
consumers
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the consumers
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end.
Secondly
,
mode
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the mode
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of
payment
for all future
bills
which
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apply
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makes it easy for
users
to just enter the OTP generated and not remember and key in bank details every time,
this
also
helps in reducing errors in entering card details. One of the most profound examples for
above
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two
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point
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is Electricity
bills
wherein earlier
people
had to visit the biller office personally to pay
bills
which causes
lot
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of
hassel
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hassle
Hassel
and lead to discomfort of standing in ques wasting entire day which now gets done in just 2 minutes on
apps
. Another instance of credit card
bills
wherein
people
had to either send a cheque to
bank
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the bank
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or visit
bank
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the bank
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to make
payment
which leads to
issue
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the issue
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of missing deadline or cheque not delivered all
such
hassels
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hassles
got stopped with online
payment
. Another advantage for consumers is attractive cashback and rewards if they pay
bill
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the bill
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through these
mobile based
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mobile-based
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apps
since they get to save
atleast
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at least
5% on the amount to pay as per reports from RBI on digital
payments
. TRAI and IAMAI in
its
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research paper
has
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published that more than 300mn
users
have downloaded these
apps
and on monthly
basis
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,basis
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there are 1bn transactions for bill
payments
. But it
also
has certain disadvantages
such
as leakage of data if
users
don’t have
strong
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and secure network and password it could result in financial or data theft which can be
hindrance
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to privacy, but considering
long
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the long
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term view these cellphone
app based
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app-based
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payment
are
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boon
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a boon
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for all.
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  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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