Children have to be punished to learn the difference between right and wrong. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishments should parents be able to give their children?

It is generally claimed that
parents
must punish their
children
in order to learn how to choose wrong and
right
in today's complex society. Personally, I partially agree and disagree with
this
point of view for some reasons. To my view, there should not be a special
punishment
that is
given to kids by their
parents
. There is no doubt true that
parents
are compelled to teach their
children
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and don'ts so that they are the most responsible people for kids. To
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point, I agree that
children
are supposed to be punished for something they did wrong. Of course, they need to be warned
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this
beforehand,
however
, if they continue doing
this
again,
then
parents
must punish them.
On the other hand
, I disagree
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some exceptional reasons. Everyone knows that drug addiction brings a disastrous life together to human beings.
For example
, if a teenager hangs out with someone who uses drugs, in
this
regard,
parents
do not have to punish him or her. It is because
children
might be
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aggressive
in
this
case, and they can run away from the house.
Therefore
,
parents
have to be near them to explain or illustrate
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life that how dangerous drugs are. From my perspective, humans have to let their offspring experience whatever they are doing. To put it simply,
parents
need to allow their
children
to choose wrong or
right
by themselves. They have to know what kinds of thing or behaviour are wrong or
right
. Only in
this
case, we will understand the gap between wrong and
right
.
For instance
, if an infant touches the fireplace, we should allow him or her to touch it because she or he will understand that it is dangerous while touching it.
Besides
that, there is not
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solution for all
children
,
in other words
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has different personal characteristics.
That is
why
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punishment
could not possibly work for everyone. To conclude, sometimes I agree and disagree with the point of punishing
children
to learn the disparity between wrong and
right
. And I am inclined to believe that no type of
punishment
can be useful for all
children
, there might be someone who needs
punishment
to avoid doing wrong, or there may be some
children
who
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a reasonable explanation to deviate from wrong things.
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