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Employers sometimes ask people applying for job for personal information such as their hobbies and interests and weather they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be useful and relevant. Other disagree. Discuss both this views and give your opinion.

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Recruiters often ask applicants to publish personal details
such
 as marital status,
intrests
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interests
 and leisure time activities along with
job
 application. They understand that
this
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 selection process.
However
, many individuals
beleive
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believe
this
 is unnecessary,
job
 work has nothing to do with personal things. Following will look at both
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 and provide
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 remarks. Personal information certainly helps
understanding
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 the personality
aspests
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aspects
 of the
invidual
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individual
 to an extent. Perhaps, personal
intrests
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interests
 and hobbies
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one
's living pattern and thoughts about
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life.
For instance
, a sports lover can be classified as stronger physically and mentally with
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 attitude as
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 to
one
 who
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 movies
at
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 free time. And
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conversely
,
second
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 individual can have more creative and artistic skills in him than
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one
, who is more likely to spend time in playing physical games. Fewer
job
 roles are so demanding, these
necessiate
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necessitate
necessitated
 a lot of travelling for staff to meet targets. And a married person may find it hard to cope due to frequent relocations of
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work place
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workplace
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.
Such
 reasons make it understandable for companies to ask
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 information
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 potential employees. On other hand, many stresses that it is unnecessary to demand insight
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 personal matters from the
job
 applicants. They feel it as a sort of privacy invasion
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 because professional work has nothing to do with personal life, rather,
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 solely relevant
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professional
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 qualification. Individual's
circumtances
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circumstances
 differ
person
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from person
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 to person, people have different priorities in life. And setting up these preferences as criteria of
one
's selection for
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a job
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 position is unfair.All contestants should be given
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a fair
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 chance to compete for
job
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the job
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 by their professional competencies rather than personal matters. To my
understanding
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 both
of
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viewpoints have solid reasons to prove them
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legitimate
 in certain conditions.
However
, critical evaluation of
job
requirments
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requirements
 and workplace
circumtances
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circumstances
 will help to set up fair criteria
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 supplying information for the candidates to the recruitment companies.
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