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Many people strive to maintain a successful career and happy family life at the same time. What problems can this situation create? What are the possible solution?

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It is often believed that
people
 tend to achieve
progressive
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 career and contended
life
 simultaneously. The long working
hours
 and multiple jobs make it difficult for a person to manage both at
a
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 same
time
, whereas the
government
 and organizations should make efforts to mitigate these prevailing
issues
.
To begin
 with, there are certain
issues
 when it comes to maintaining
balance
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 between family and
work
.
That is
 to say, an employer forces workers to
work
 long
hours
on
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 the name of achieving targets and appraisal which put
extra
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 burden on their mind and body. Despite working for his/her family, an individual could not find
time
 to enjoy with their family. Owing to
this
 fact both
work
 and family
life
get
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 disturbed.
Moreover
, many
people
 try to meet the needs and demands of their family members;
for instance
, parents are compelled to
work
 part-
time
 as well after their regular job, which
leave
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 very little
time
 for their loved ones. Even though the problem related to
work
-
life
 balance
are
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 escalating at an alarming rate, these
issues
 can be mitigated if
worker’s
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 friendly is devised by the
government
 and corporations. The
first
 and foremost option, to solve these
issues
 is setting a
time
-bar on working
hours
.
People
 should not be forced to
work
 more than 6
hours
 a day
,
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 so that they could devote the rest of their
time
for
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 family.
Secondly
, as
people
 do part-
time
 jobs to meet expenses,
for
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that minimum wage rate ought to be increased by the
government
; Since the major expense is schooling and healthcare, it should be sponsored either by the
government
 or employer. By implementing the aforementioned policies it would be possible for a person to live a happy
life
 along with a successful career. In conclusion,
although
 success in both
the
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personal
life
 and job is hard to attain, regulations that
favors
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 employees can solve these
issues
.
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