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Most people these days prefer getting news online to reading newspaper or watching TV. Do you think it is a positive development?

#people #news #newspaper #tv #development
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,
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 have different interests whether to read the daily
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 online or on
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. While it is believed that
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 provides
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 way for
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receive
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 immediately, watching
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 seems to be a
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positive
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society. It is true that many
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 to watch
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recent
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 through their mobile phone or
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laptop
. By subscribing the certain
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 website that many readers can get the breaking
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anytimes
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anytime
 and anywhere. There are various of
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resources
 that
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 can search the
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 background deeply on the internet which watching
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 on the
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television
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 can not reply and have to wait for
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audiences
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 the majority preference for
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modern
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 choice. In spite of the positive reasons
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 online
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 above, I believe that watching
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 is the best way to get the
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correct
current
 information. It is important that the
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news
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 are normally well organized and investigated by the whole group of journalists.
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 been regulated and
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supervised
 by the government authorities if they are reported the fake or exaggerate
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. Many
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 tend to watch it on the
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 because they believe it will be the most
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truthful
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 resource which is pretty close to the
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original
 one. If there is no
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 had only
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 the online
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 to read that reader might be misleading by the fake
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 reporters which can cause a negative consequence to
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society. In conclusion, it is clear that online
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 is the most efficient way that modern
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people
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received
receive
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recent
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 immediately, I do think that
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 the most
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reliable
 resources to get the correct report and it
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positive
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society.
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