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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only place available for building them is in the country side. Some people believe it is more important to protect the country side and not building new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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It seems like there are some arguments when it comes to utilizing the country side's places especially nowadays due to the increasing number of population all over the world. I believe using the spaces would be a brilliant idea to solve the severe condensed city headache. On the one hand, It is clear that cities have a problem because of tons of people there, which leads to the traffic jam problem whenever city dwellers commute every morning and evening. Once there are built more houses in
countrysidessides
 as well,
then
 more people would live there.
This
 means there would be a likelihood that the city's condensed trouble will be solved a bit as time goes by.
On the other hand
,
in contrast
 to the worries about being devastated owing to the development of the countryside, it could be actually beneficial. By trying to make a sustainable development, we can guard
countrysidessides
 without ruining much. To illustrate more, the government can make new roads and brand new commercial buildings in
countrysidessides
 avoiding the main roads for wildlife. What's more, if
countrysidessides
 are well developed just like other staple cities,
then
 there would be economical benefits thanks to the tourists from other countries. Using the surplus money, the government can save the environment in a better way In conclusion, since there are more expected beneficial things when there are made more places in countrysides, I think they should be done as much as possible.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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