Employer sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information ,such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some job application
request
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requests

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personal
information
from each
condidate
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candidate

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. Companies like to know how applicants spending their free time or their family status. There are
meny
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many

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believes
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who believes

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that
this
information
important for the employer while, others think that personal
information
is a different topic.
This
essay will discuss both sides and I give my thoughts. Many people
beileve
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believe

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that nothing wrong to share some personal
information
with your future employer. Some
aplication
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application

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form can
be contain
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contain

It appears that the form of the verb contain does not work with be in this sentence.

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personal questions
such
as what is your hobby or your family status. These data is
inportant
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important

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for companies because they can have a bit better understanding
about
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of

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condidates
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candidates

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life styles
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lifestyles

The word life styles seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.

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and personalities so
this
informations
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information

It appears that the singular demonstrative this is modifying the plural noun informations. Consider using a plural demonstrative or a singular noun instead.

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helps them to
chose
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choose

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a
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the

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right person. Other think that personal
information
should not
been
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be

The verb been after the modal verb should does not appear to be in the correct form. Consider changing the verb form.

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asked in those
aplication
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application

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form because work and personal life are a two different topic. Many
peopel
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people

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believes
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believe

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some questions violating
ther
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their
the

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human rights and it has nothing to do with their job.
Informations
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Information
Pieces of information

It appears that Informations is an uncountable noun and should not be made plural. Consider changing the noun.

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such
as
favorite
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favourite

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music band or family status are not relevant at all. These sort of questions not helping them when it comes to a final
decission
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decision

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. In conclusion,
this
essay discussed that personal
informations
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information
pieces of information

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can or can not be
usefull
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useful
usefully

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for
employer
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the employer
an employer

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. Even though
,
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apply

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I believe that personal
informations
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information
pieces of information

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are
extremly
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extremely

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usuful
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useful

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for companies but
thoese
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those
these

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questiones
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questions

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should not violate human rights. No
dubt
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doubt

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those data is helping them to get a clearer
pictur
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picture

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about
condidates
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candidates

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personalities and lifestyle which is very useful when it comes to a final count down.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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