The world’s natural resources, such as oil, forests and fresh water are being consumed at an ever-increasing rate. What are the dangers of the situation? What can be done to solve the problem?

Natural
resources
are the salubrious gift of
a
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nature that provides countless benefits to mankind.
However
, due to the modernization consumption of these
resources
has increased rapidly and creates
the
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number of problems, which I would like to expand in the upcoming paragraphs along with suitable remedies.
initially
, suddenly shrinkage in the forest will give birth to air and environment pollution. It would effects the ecological system very badly that would not be able to convert the corbondio oxide into oxygen due to the vast cutting of the tress.
Moreover
, it will
also
release harmful gasses into the air that will
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as a sinful virus in the future.
Secondly
, blindly usage of natural
resources
will bring a situation towards the verge of extinction about oil, wooden and water which will not affect only human life-style and
also
put a vast impact on world economy due to the lack of availability of respective sources.
Thirdly
, unbalanced with nature is
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reason for natural disasters
such
as global warming, tsunamis and acid rain. These ongoing issues are the result of access usage of natural
resources
. ,
However
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every coin has two sides. So,
this
problem could be tackled by applying some painstaking steps.
First
of all, the government should set up a specific standard. In which there should be some limitations for using those
resources
and heavy penalty should be charge those are not obeyed to government rules. ,
Moreover
media and newspaper both should give awareness article about how to maintain eco-system and
also
run some campaign where people should get useful information about
preservation
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of natural
resources
. pondering over the topic, it could be seen that nature is the foundation of the
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and
this
eco-system that could be safe by proper coordination between government and human society.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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