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one people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenage should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People have different views on what
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 were focused on by
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 in their
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. Some people believe that
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 ought to learn all
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 when they are in school while I agree with those who think that teenagers should concentrate on the most favourite or best
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 which were found by
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. On one hand, the curriculum is found the most suitable for all
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.
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 of all, all
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 were verified by the Ministry of Education so the teenager can be follow those
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 for the time when they
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. Each
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 has different views and extremely interesting when the
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 learns in school.
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 as mathematic helps
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 has better at calculating, history brings
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 to historic place or event.
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, all
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 are quite significant for preparation before teenagers find their jobs.
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,
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 which find the most excited always make
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 really want to
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. The moods of a
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 before getting the lesson are important because the behaviour of leaner helps them absorb depth knowledge .
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, the
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 who loves math always gets a high score at that
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 and really want to find something harder and enhance their knowledge.
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, the
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 which
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 want to
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 can help them find relative jobs,
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students
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 are easy to get a high position and good salary on their career. In conclusion, all
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 was quite needed for all
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 in their
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 but they should find their best
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 to get more interesting in them.

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