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Band 1

The most effective way to solve traffic and transport problems in the cities is to discourage people from the suburbs or the countryside from moving to the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Few issues have drawn as much scholarly attention as traffic issues in the
cities
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, especially in the past few years. A few
people
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 believe that by discouraging
people
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moving
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from moving
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 from
countryside
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the countryside
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 to
cities
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, we can avoid the traffic issues, while others argue that it is not a solution. I am of the opinion that stopping
people
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 migrating to
cities
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 from
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countryside
contryside
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the contryside
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 will solve the transport problems. Primarily, by reducing or stopping
people
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moving
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 to
cities
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, governments can reduce congestion in the
cities
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.
Cities
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 all over the world are overcrowded with
people
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 and providing transport facilities for them is a major challenge for governments.
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, every year millions of
people
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 are migrating to
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countryside
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the countryside
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, which
increase
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 the traffic problems.
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, migration of
people
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 from
countryside
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the countryside
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 will bring cy h

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • overpopulation
  • infrastructure
  • public transport system
  • commute times
  • peak hours
  • density
  • urban infrastructure
  • sustainable living
  • satellite cities
  • digital solutions
  • remote work
  • regional lifestyle diversity
  • traffic congestion
  • suburban and rural areas
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