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The most effective way to solve traffic and transport problems in the cities is to discourage people from the suburbs or the countryside from moving to the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#traffic #transport #cities #people #suburbs #countryside
Few
issues
 have drawn as much scholarly attention as traffic
issues
 in
cities
, especially for the past few years. A few
people
 believe that discouraging
people
 from the rural areas from migrating to the countryside will solve the problem, while
other
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others
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 argue that it is not a solution. I am of the opinion that stopping the migration of the
people
 from rural areas to the
cities
 will reduce the congestion in the urban areas.
Following
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 paragraphs will discuss the reasons with some reasons. Primarily, with a lot of job opportunities and
high
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a high
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 standard of living,
cities
 attract
people
 from the villages. With
growth
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the growth
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 of the population, major
cities
 across the world experiencing
the
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apply
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tarffic
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traffic
 and transport
issues
.
Migration
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The migration
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 of
people
 from
countryside
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the countryside
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 to metropolises made
cities
 congested.
Also
,
usage
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the usage
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 of public transport by the migrants will increase the congestion and boost
the
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transport
issues
.
In addition
,
people
 from suburbs daily travel to
city
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the city
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 for their work purpose which
make
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 traffic problem worse.
Moreover
,
this
 trend causes different kinds of pollution and scarcity of food.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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