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n Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Most of the
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 in Britain shift into old
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 home after getting old where health care workers look over the.
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homes
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 are funded by the
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. Some
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 may argue that it's not a responsibility of authority to fund
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homes
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. In my ,opinion the
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 should help with
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homes
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 and I totally disagree with the above-given argument. In
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, due to the increase in the nuclear family, there is an increase of migrating elder
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 towards old
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homes
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. Children's after getting independent left their parents alone. There is an increase in
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 many old
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 don't have children's so after getting old , there is no one to supervise them. So because of these reasons elderly folks move to old
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homes
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 to stay with other
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. All the elderly
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 in their young
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 had given taxes to the national authorities. So during the old
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 period taking care of
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 a community and helping them should be the key role of the
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. Adults children have a primary role in taking care of their parents. But
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 doesn't mean that
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 should neglect
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people
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 once were the ideal citizen of the nation. So it's
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 responsibility too to look over old
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people
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 by raising funds or by making more old-
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homes
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. To conclude, the
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 plays an important role in raising money for old-
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people
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. As
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 community are the most respectful and were once taxpayer of the society, the
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 can't neglect them.
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