n Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Most of the
people
in Britain shift into old
age
home after getting old where health care workers look over the.
Such
old
age
homes
are funded by the
government
. Some
people
may argue that it's not a responsibility of authority to fund
such
old-
age
homes
. In my ,opinion the
government
should help with
such
old-
age
homes
and I totally disagree with the above-given argument. In
this
,
an
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essay I will place the reason and my opinion towards
this
notion.
Firstly
, due to the increase in the nuclear family, there is an increase of migrating elder
people
towards old
age
homes
. Children's after getting independent left their parents alone. There is an increase in
this
trend in the
last
few decades. ,
,
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Secondly
many old
people
don't have children's so after getting old , there is no one to supervise them. So because of these reasons elderly folks move to old
age
homes
to stay with other
people
. All the elderly
people
in their young
age
had given taxes to the national authorities. So during the old
age
period taking care of
such
a community and helping them should be the key role of the
government
. Adults children have a primary role in taking care of their parents. But
this
doesn't mean that
government
should neglect
such
oldage community.
This
people
once were the ideal citizen of the nation. So it's
government
responsibility too to look over old
age
people
by raising funds or by making more old-
age
homes
. To conclude, the
government
plays an important role in raising money for old-
age
people
. As
this
community are the most respectful and were once taxpayer of the society, the
government
can't neglect them.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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