Some people think that women should not be allowed to work in the police force. Do you agree or disagree?

contemporary epoch,
are presented with many opportunities in every field to add value
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their skills. One
area of work wherein
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the participation

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has caused a lot of
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is the
force. The opponents believe that because of certain limitations which females have as compared to their male counterparts, they should be refrained from joining the
, I believe that
bias is unnecessary and
can prove as an asset to the team. To commence with, according to the opponents,
job needs a lot of physical strength to deal with unexpected situations especially at crime scenes. Indeed, the strength between a man and a woman cannot be measured on
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same scale because of the differences in the body composition that they have.
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there are many techniques like the Asian form called Jusitju which gives an upper hand to
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a woman

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in a fight.
must be trained to deal with situations that can help them use their strength in the right place when required. Another important factor is that unlike men, who are
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power and authority,
are more inclined towards making a compromise which makes them the best member when dealing with offenders which
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good questioning and negotiation skills.
, having a
accompany the female criminal adds a layer of trust in the system and avoids any possibility of misbehaviour that can happen during the arrest. To recapitulate, I firmly believe that having
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the police

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force can add immense value and strengthen the team.
, it is the responsibility of the government to ensure that appropriate training is imparted to the female force.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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