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Some people think that women should not be allowed to work in the police force. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #women #work #police #force
In
this
 contemporary epoch,
women
 are presented with many opportunities in every field to add value
with
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to
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 their skills. One
such
 area of work wherein
participation
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the participation
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 of
women
 has caused a lot of
controversy
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 is the
police
 force. The opponents believe that because of certain limitations which females have as compared to their male counterparts, they should be refrained from joining the
police
.
However
, I believe that
this
 bias is unnecessary and
women
 can prove as an asset to the team. To commence with, according to the opponents,
police
 job needs a lot of physical strength to deal with unexpected situations especially at crime scenes. Indeed, the strength between a man and a woman cannot be measured on
a
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 same scale because of the differences in the body composition that they have.
However
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 there are many techniques like the Asian form called Jusitju which gives an upper hand to
a
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women
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women
 in a fight.
Women
 must be trained to deal with situations that can help them use their strength in the right place when required. Another important factor is that unlike men, who are
weilding
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wielding
willing
 power and authority,
women
 are more inclined towards making a compromise which makes them the best member when dealing with offenders which
requires
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 good questioning and negotiation skills.
Also
, having a
women
police
 accompany the female criminal adds a layer of trust in the system and avoids any possibility of misbehaviour that can happen during the arrest. To recapitulate, I firmly believe that having
women
 in
police
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 force can add immense value and strengthen the team.
However
, it is the responsibility of the government to ensure that appropriate training is imparted to the female force.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inherent equality
  • law enforcement
  • empathy
  • gender-based violence
  • community relations
  • diversity
  • team performance
  • systemic gender bias
  • physical requirements
  • culture of masculinity
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