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Living in a country where you gave to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

#country #language #information #features #comparison
The line graph illustrates information about the approximate rate of
rentals
 and
sales
 ( in different sizes) of movies from a specific shop during the year 2002 and 2011. From the ,graph it can be seen that
DVD
sales
 climbed up, while
rentals
 plunged over the years.
Moreover
, VHS
sales
 and Blue-ray
sales
 were less popular in
this
 period. In 2002, approximately 45,000
rentals
/
sales
 accounted for
DVD
sales
.
This
 showed a gradual rise and peaked at over 200,000 in 2007. Afterwards, the
sales
 of
DVD
 steady came down to 180,000 in 2011. The number of
rentals
 was just over 180,000 in 2002, which was the most popular at
this
 time.
Then
, it gradually showed a downward trend to 140,000 in 2006.
Finally
, in 2011 it reached a rate of nearly 60,000. Regarding VHS
sales
, they started at more than 80,000 in 2002,
this
 was double the percentage of
DVD
sales
.
However
,
this
 steadily dropped down to 10,000 in 2005. Blue-ray
sales
 became recognized in 2007, starting with 2000.
This
 number doubled up in 2009 and
finally
 went up to around 10,000.
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