2. Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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system
has been changed a lot.
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Students
missbehiavour
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misbehaviour
are
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costing
causing
more problem than in the past. Many believe that
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the way of parenting
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responsible
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discipline, while others
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the education
system
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caused
closed
this
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problem
.
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discuss
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both
opinion
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opinions
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and I give my point of view. In the
last
few decades
educations
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the educations
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system
has been changed a lot. Many
feels
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that teachers are not as strict as they used to be but the problem is that
stydents
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students
has more rights present days so
this
system
does not allow
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to control them.
For instance
, if students using their
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educator can not take it due to new regulation
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even
mention
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using
physical
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punishment
. Even though,
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only has a few
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to educate children up to a point
this
system
is
workig
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working
work
. Many believe that parents are
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responsible for their children
behiavour
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behaviour
. Parenting is the key solution in
this
case because parents have more options to
punnish
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punish
their kids.
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childrens
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children
children's
following their orders
however
every situation is different.
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did not do what my teacher said in highschool my mother did not let me watch
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tv for a week and it was effective so I believe that parents
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responsibility
to teach children how to
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believe
have
. In conclusion, even though school workers have
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limited tools to discipline
styudents
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students
, they can deal with them up to a point
however
,
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parents
have more time and option to discipline their
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children
childrens
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children
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.
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