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With the help of internet and television many people are becoming famous. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Include examples.

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A lot of
people
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 have attained celebrity status by receiving the help of the
internet
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 and television and in my opinion,
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 is a negative trend.
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 with reasons and examples on the same.
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, social networks like Facebook and Instagram have enabled every user to have unlimited followers and due to
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, most of their users tend to go into a competitive mindset of attracting the maximum number of followers. While
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 mindset has made them famous, it has
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 wreaked havoc on their mental and physical health.
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, in recent times, many famous Instagram models have expired due to low sugar.The reason for these unnecessary deaths is their mindset to keep their bodies in ZERO size figure to attract followers on social networks.
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, the
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, while helping
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 to become famous, is
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 making them vulnerable while they are trying to keep up their celeb status for a long duration.
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, when a few famous youngsters tell about themselves on television,
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 other youngsters who are not famous try to become one by sharing all of their information over the
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.
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, a teenage girl was attacked at her house after she posted on FACEBOOK that she was alone in her house. Teenagers unknowingly share their privately identifiable information over the
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 to
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 with malicious intent and thereby become victims of crime. So
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 facility of televisions making celebrities out of normal
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 has made them vulnerable to crime. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that the
Internet
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 and Televisions have helped some to become famous but it is a negative trend as the number of
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 who have become victims of fraud and death while trying to become famous is very high compared to the number of
people
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 who have succeeded in becoming famous.
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