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Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Global digital media has brought about the death of term and space.
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 nation
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 to Converse more via social apps like WhatsApp, Facebook, or Instagram than in person. It is by all means a positive development because it saves
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 day and certainly
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 enhance their communication skills.
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 off, today’s paradigm shift has made it necessary to Converse online as
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 have hectic schedules. So, getting together online saves generation. To exemplify it, society work round the clock and hardly get
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 to meet their friends or relatives.
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, they communicate online, and in
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 way, they can stay in touch with them. Apart from it, now and
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, unavoidable circumstances have made it mandatory to converse online. So, it saves their hour and at the same point helps to retain their relationships. To continue, using the internet for socializing online with their loved ones not only equips them with the latest techniques but
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 improves their communication skill.
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, most
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 feel incapable of conversing online because of their reserved nature. If they Converse online, they gradually overcome their shyness and communicate fluently. Eventually, it helps in making them fluent. So, it is a good way to improve soft skills. In conclusion,
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 has made it indispensable to make friends as well as to stay connected with loved ones through different apps. Getting together online equips them with good communication skills and
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 makes them aware of the current technology which provides with them the amenities of video calls or conferences as well.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social media platforms
  • online interactions
  • virtual communication
  • global community
  • interpersonal skills
  • digital divide
  • cyberspace
  • virtual presence
  • social networking
  • mental wellbeing
  • digital literacy
  • safe spaces
  • marginalized groups
  • face-to-face communication
  • socialisation
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