In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a partuclar time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

In today's society,
crime
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rate is increasing day by day and
as a result
, parents are afraid to let their
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children
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go out. US authorities took
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to impose a curfew for youth at
night
and if they want to go out, one adult must accompany them. According to my point of view, I strongly believe that
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it is a really good initiative taken by
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government to prevent
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involvement
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the involement
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of
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children
childrens
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children
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in illicit activities. In the below essay, I would like to unfold the topics and provide relevant
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to support my views. To commence with, criminal activity is one of the main concerns behind
this
restriction.
In addition
to
this
,
in
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age, they are not enough mature to understand and choose what is right or wrong. Some of the recent studies
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that
,
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involvment
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involvement
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of youth in crime is more than 60%.
Furthermore
, they get easily influenced by some other person as an example, to earn money in
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the easy
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and fast way they choose
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path
such
as
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rotary
robbery
probably
by watching someone doing so.
Moreover
, it is often observed that, if parents are not paying attention towards them, they can become drug addict as most
of
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teenagers
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drugs are normal nowadays. Most of the time they
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consuming drugs with their friends
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parties and
night
clubs.
Hence
, imposing
this
night
curfew will help to stay away from
such
things.
In addition
, wild animals often
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disturbs
night
time as recently leopards and bears were reported in some regions,
thus
, they can harm teenagers if they were roaming alone. To put it in nuts shell,
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even though
, youngsters
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this
decision is taking their freedom away, I strongly
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opinion
that is
a great step towards making
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safe which in turn will help to reduce
crime
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rate.
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I feel parents role is
also
important to help and shape their offspring future bright by helping them in making
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choices.
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