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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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The current generation of
children
 is spending most of their time in front of the
television
. Anyway,
television
 cannot play the role of a
book
 as a learning utility,
hence
children
 these days are not experts in education. I completely disagree with
this
 statement. I believe that
television
 play a key role in
children
's education and capable enough to replace books.
Firstly
, digital media is an apt replacement for books, it helps
children
 to learn many things quickly especially for elementary school
children
. Small
children
 find it difficult to read and memorise the alphabets and numbers from a
book
 whereas the same content is easy to ready listening and watching from
television
, in the form of rhymes.
For example
, my daughter was struggling to learn number names by reading a
book
, but she learned the same content watching a
children
's channel on
television
 very quickly and
furthermore
, her mother tongue is Telugu and now she started learning the English language watching cartoons in English.
Secondly
, watching
television
 help
children
 relive their stress, make them more creative, and help their school subjects easy to understand.
For example
, nowadays, most
television
 channels are telecasting content related to arts and animal geography which help
children
 to relax and at the same time to increase their general knowledge watching them, after they reach home from the whole day of schooling.
However
, it
also
 required to focus on their books as well
although
 they have a great learning curve watching TV as ,after a certain age, the
book
 plays a key role in academics. In conclusion,
children
 spend their time in front of the TV impacting their education as digital media cannot replace a
book
. I do not agree with
this
 statement. I believe that
television
 is providing many learning opportunities for
children
 and helping them to learn many things in an easier way.
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