Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

A lot of people now goes to startup their own
business
instead
of working in a company.
Which
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is
difficult
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decision to start
business
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a business
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from scratch without any guarantee that it will
success
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succeed
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or not. Sometimes businessmen or successful companies support an entrepreneur by
trainings
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training
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or financial support. Being a self-employed have
the
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positive and negative side. On the positive
side
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there
are
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a comfortable space to work,
opportunity
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the opportunity
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to make your own rules and make your own requirements that you see
it
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apply
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is important in your
business
.
On the other hand
in
negative
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side, you don't have a guarantee that your
business
will success
also
you don't have a fixed income because that make your own
business
risky
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decision. In
companies
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you have a fixed salary maybe it's enough to live a comfortable life and move you from
class
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one class
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to another class. But on the disadvantages, you might make a concession against
this
benefit. Like supervisor
behaviors
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with you. Or the way that other employees do to get a
promotions
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or gain much money without any effort. In conclusion, there are many different benefits and disadvantages to be self-employed. In my
opinion
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I think it's deserved to try and make our
business
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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