History tells that people have often thought about creating an ideal society, but most of the times fail in making this happen. What is your opinion about an ideal society? How can we create an ideal society?

Every human being
desire
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to build and be a part of an ideal
society
.
Although
many times in the past people have
fascinated
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by constructing
such
a community, often they have not succeeded in creating
one
.
This
essay will discuss what makes a well-ordered community and how can we create
one
. An ideal community should be
the
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one
where the human being can dwell with complete peace and harmony.
This
civilisation is free from any discrimination against caste, race, colour or religion of people living there.
For instance
, civilians residing in
such
a
society
will develop a sense of fairness and justice. To give an example from Indian history, during the rule of Emperor Akbar, his
subject
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dwelled in total harmony and fairness as the Emperor would not tolerate any inequality against
anything
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them
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. For these reasons, I believe an ideal
society
is
the
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one
that provides equal opportunities to every person irrespective of what
democratic
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they belong to. There are certain ways in which building
such
a
society
can be possible.
Firstly
, every human being should learn the values of equality and must treat every other living being with respect and kindness.
Secondly
, they must elect political leaders who share the same view for their countries as
this
will help the government to intervene and keep a check if any imbalance is observed in
society
.
For example
, the US has elected Joe Biden as their president who believes in equality which gives a sense of pride among citizens and encourages them to inculcate and spread these values.
To sum up
, creating a perfect
society
can be a very challenging mission as it is difficult to instil complete peace and harmony.
However
, it is not entirely impossible. By drilling these values into all humans and with the help of government, we can ultimately contribute to making an ideal
society
for the betterment of people.
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