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Many people believe that family members are very important in life while others say friends are important. Do you agree or disagree with this statement

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It has been a debate among people whether family
members
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 or
friends
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who
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apply
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play a more essential part
in
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of
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 our lives. In my opinion, both families and
friends
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 are indispensable contributors to the development of
everyone's
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every one's
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life
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 for various reasons explained below. It is undeniable that home is considered widely
as
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 where
family
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the family
a family
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 is. Family is a vital part and engraved in everyone's childhood as those who raise, teach, and guide us through lessons and advice. They are those
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 we can count on, always have our back, support us both physically and mentally through up and down of
life
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, and whose shoulders are where we can cry on.
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, it is believed that family
members
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 have a huge impact on our characteristics and personal development especially during
childhood
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the childhood
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 period as children are likely to learn from and reflect their parents or other
members
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' personalities.
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, conflicts might occur due to the age gap or generation gap among family
members
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, and
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 is when
friends
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 step in to fill in the gap.
Friends
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 play a significantly important role in everyone's adulthood. As we start to enter schools, families might not always be there, but
friends
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 are present during most of our learning period.
Friends
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 can be classmates, teachers, tutors, or anyone else who will learn, experience, discover, and teach us
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 new things in
life
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. They can
also
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 be reliable partners for us to vent out inner feelings, ask for advice and help in some situations. Despite the fact that not all
friends
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 coming into our lives will always be there and stay with us like families, but bosom
friends
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 are irreplaceable pieces to complete our
life
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 puzzle. In conclusion, family
members
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 and
friends
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 share an equally important part
in
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of
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 everybody's
life
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 journey. Both subjects are absolute treasures that all of us must always value and be grateful to have in
life
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.

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