Business & cultural exchange between countries is increasing and this is thought to be a positive development by some. However, others believe that it might lead to loss of identity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
this
modern-day world, People are
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closer to
one
another than ever due to the accessibility of technology and ,
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they are learning and try new things on regular basis.
This
has created a healthy exchange in terms of culture and way of life but
also
has demerits associated with it.
Firstly
,
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essay will talk about how barter of trade and lifestyle is beneficial and
Secondly
, how it may affect
one
's own identification. To start off, the Commerce exchange helps citizens with various investment and business opportunities which can directly reflect
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country's GDP and
moreover
It
also
facilitates the accessibility of foreign
goods
in the local market. Interchange of customs can help human beings learn a lot about new food, language and traditions.
For example
, when the East India company came for the trade during the 18th century, people learned about the new language, traditions and food they use to eat.
On the contrary
, learning new customs can hamper the lifestyle of a person. Adjustments are very difficult and for a person to start copying someone's way of life might affect
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his pocket in the longer run.
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of overseas
goods
in the local market can hamper the sale of regional
goods
and in ,turn can affect
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the loss of money and brand value which is nothing but
one
's identity.
For example
, the Introduction of foreign brands like Amazon has impacted
on
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the sales of
goods
from the local market. To conclude, Yes I completely agree that modern-day barter has eased
one
's understanding of distant civilization in terms of Art, Nourishment and profession but have
also
resulted in the loss of distinctiveness.
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