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Traffic congestion is a serious problem in many countries around the world. Describe the situation in your home country and suggest some solutions.

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In many nations around the globe,
roadblock
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 has been a grave issue.
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The
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 country
such
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 as, India from where I belong,
traffic
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 congestion has been the serious problem that has to be tackled at the most priority. In
this
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 essay, some measures are suggested that can help to resolve the issue to
certain
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 degree.
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, public
transport
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 should be accessible at cheaper rates to the citizens so that people opt for it more rather than their own personal
vehicles
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. Many people choose to commute in their own private cars due to lack of public
transport
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 system on frequent intervals which can cause them to delay in reaching their desired locations. According to
me
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, the buses or metro should be available at more frequent timings and at close stops.
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,
the
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fuel prices should be increased and heavy taxes imposed on
vehicles
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. In
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way
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 people will go
for
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 public
transport
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 and in turn causing less
traffic
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 on roads.
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, mostly the
traffic
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 is caused by
vehicles
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 commuting to offices and schools which creates
a
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havoc in morning and evening hours,
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 can be resolved by sharing the vehicle which travels on
thesame
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the same
 route.
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, the companies and schools should offer their
transport
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 at cheaper cost so everyone will choose the common
transport
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, resulting in less number of
vehicles
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 on road.
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, the government should impose the alternate usage of
vehicles
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 as already implied by country like China which caused
the
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 tremendous decline in
traffic
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. To recapitulate,
traffic
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 congestion is a mind-blogging issue which needs to tackled as early as possible as not only it causes a delay in travel purpose but
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 an amount of
traffic
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 leads to the great amount of noise pollution and air pollution which can lead to detrimental health issues.
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