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Some think Government spending on Infrastructure (Transport, Housing etc) is considered the most important for a nation. While others believe that Education, Health and HR values to be more important areas for government expenditure. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#think #government #infrastructure #transport #nation #education #health #hr #values #areas #expenditure
In the modern world, the basic necessity of a citizen are food clothing and shelter but in developing
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countries
coutries
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 there is a need for
development
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the development
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 of transport routes,
healthecare
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healthcare
health care
, schooling and employment. My essay will talk about how the groundwork of accessibility and habitation are
importance
 with proper medical
mangement
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management
, tutoring and occupation.
Firstly
, any dominion needs access to transport for them to reach their own
people
. It helps increase the movement of goods and materials which
inturn
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in turn
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 helps locals flourish their business. Infrastructure development does not only help in connecting but
also
 helps in creating more employment. At the same
time
 by investing more money in builders and developers helps
people
 get
better
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 lifestyle with safety and security.
For example
, during the construction of
Agra
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the Agra
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 - Delhi highway more
10,000
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than 10,000
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 jobs were produced for the citizens.
Secondly
,
Tution
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Tuition
 and Medical facilities are of
utmost
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importance
 in any country. It has been seen that at many places
people
 lack
the
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apply
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basic education and health facilities.
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Government
Goverment
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The goverment
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 needs to introduce school and schemes where
people
 can study
at
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free of cost and
same
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the same
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time
 are provided with all
necesssary
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necessary
 materials to
succedd
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succeed
further
. Health facilities
needs
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 to be developed where
people
 are treated with minimum cost and are provided with obligatory medicines from
time
 on
time
.
For example
 - Local bodies in Gujarat have started
free
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 school for the backwards class
people
 with free meals. In my opinion, Infrastructure and
trasport
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transport
 are important for the nation but
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government
goverment
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 cannot undermine the
importance
 of Education,
Healthe
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Health
 and HR values at
same
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time
 because for me they are of the same
importance
 as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • foreign investments
  • business operations
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • quality of life
  • homelessness
  • affordable living conditions
  • knowledgeable workforce
  • skilled workforce
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • public health
  • life expectancy
  • burden of diseases
  • employee satisfaction
  • employee retention
  • long-term benefits
  • immediate economic gains
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