Some people think the government should spend more money on sport facilities for top athletes. Other people think the government should spend more money on sport facilities for everybody. Discuss both views

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whether
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governments should provide more monetary support on fitness facilities for professional
atheles
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athletes
or for ordinary people has sparked a hot controversy in public.
This
essay is going to throw
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light on both views of spending governments
budeget
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budget
. On the one hand, It is
unanle
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unable
to deny that investing money for
sport
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structures for everybody.
First
, the citizens would improve their health than ever before due to the fact that they are approved of using fitness
equipments
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equipment
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provided by the government.
As a result
, the improvement of the population‘s health condition could enhance the country’s
economics
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because they are in full possession of their faculties.
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, workers could be motivated to produce more merchandise when they are in a good health condition, which
also
means that there will be more contribution is going to be made
the
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country.
Moreover
, having more opportunities to do exercises will
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create
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a sporty and healthy
environments
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among
public
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so people could have more chances to make friends with others and
also
learn how to build a team while playing sports as well. In fact, both residents and government would take advantages of
this
excution
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execution
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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