Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Arts is part of the cultural
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and development of society. No one can say that there is too much
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being spent on it.
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art was part of the daily life of the bourgeois it should be at the reach of everyone no despite the stratum.
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people's
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should be
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to resolve their
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demands
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always the issue when it comes to the constituent's taxes. Cities have their own needs and there is always something to be solved. Politicians often face a
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on what they should do with the
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in order to face
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problems. Should they build more facilities for health care and education? or
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programs to reduce pollution and protect the
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environment
. Governments have their budgets and agendas. All subjects are important, but ones are more than others. If we put on a scale the basic needs of the people over something
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not primary
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important, we could agree that the
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should be more trouble solving focused. There are alternatives to raise
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for artistic activities and keeping the administration
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intact for
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important topic.
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, using media and sponsorship to raise
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for events. In short,
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should focus all their
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and energy
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real problems, equally as they promote extracurricular activities to contribute to the development of society through art.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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