One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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agree that promoting medical care can let most of
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become long-lasting.
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, whether it is positive or negative to let
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live longer, and my personal opinion. A
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of
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believe that there are more benefits, and I agree with them too.
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, I agree that productivity will increase,
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means more output per hour because of a vast
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of
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. From lots of young
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and the enthusiasm to learn something new, Even though you might consider of
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, some of them have lots of experience and knowledge if doing certain jobs. The reason is that they have more time doing these
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than some young
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is called ageism and I can see that in some workplaces, but all of those came from a fixed mindset of a large
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of
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. I personally think that more and more
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should combat ageism and create a healthy workplace
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do not have to learn something new as it is
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, but they can continue to do the job they did for a long time.
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, there are different kinds of jobs, they do not have to only gather in one area and
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together. It is
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not fair to abandon them for doing
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because some of them have the zest and passion of it and they can actually achieve a great job. There are always possibilities so I still stick with my point.
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, there are still
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who disagree with
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living longer, it might cause a problem called overpopulation, which is associated with negative environmental and economic outcomes which are from the impacts of deforestation, climate change, water pollution… As our planet earth has a limit to provide us needs or even wants, they only produce a certain amount of raw materials each year, which will not make everyone on the planet satisfied. If there is another increase in population, it will be worse, and that
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links to poverty, which is the main factor that will be caused after.
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, a
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of
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are quite pessimistic, and if they have a choice to live or die, they would want to choose the negative one. Not everyone is positive and optimistic about
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and we all understand.
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why they would prefer not to live longer, as
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for them is an ordeal or a long-term battling. In conclusion, I strongly agree that it will be better if
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live longer, there are more benefits and drawbacks for me and I am sure there are more
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who love
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than some
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who will not.
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is an unexpected journey, and there are always barriers and
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what makes you a better person.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • elderly population
  • health care systems
  • pension funds
  • extended family relationships
  • quality of life
  • aging population
  • economic growth
  • volunteer work
  • expertise
  • financial planning
  • retirement
  • age-related diseases
  • medical research
  • healthier lifestyles
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