In many countries, teenagers are encouraged to find part-time jobs. Some think this is a good development while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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of nations' people have different views about

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or not to advise

the

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young adults to

work

part

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part-time

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time

. While some people believed it is a

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positive

trend to encourage them to

work

after

school

, I would disagree with the view and the adolescents should concentrate on their

study

first

.

To begin

with,

some

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countries

peope

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people

tend to believe that teenagers should start to earn

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their living as early as possible. By working part-

time

that can

cultive

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cultivate

them to be an independent person. They will be able to pay their own

school

tuition without family supports.

Furthermore

, they can

also

gain more essential skill from

work

,

such

as working experiences, team cooperation and more. The

study

had found that students who do

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part-time

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time

job have

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the

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matured and

reseponsibility

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responsibility

personality.

Therefore

, many people think it is

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beneficial

for

teeanger

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teenager

teenagers

to

work

in their spare

time

.

On the other hand

, I do believe that teenagers should concentrate on their

study

first

.

Firstly

,

school

life has already long enough for students and

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sometimes

they

also

have homework or assessments need to complete. As a student can be count as a

full

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full-time

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time

job for teenager and

study

is their priority duty. In some country, the

school

time

are

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normally from early morning to late afternoon that

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same as a normal worker. If students

are encourage

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are encouraged

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to

work

after

school

that they will have no

time

to review their lesson from the class or doing their homework. It seems difficult to concentrate during class

time

,

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if they

have

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spend another energy at

work

.

Therefore

, It could lead to

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failing

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on their exam because they might lack

of

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concentrate on

study

and

tireness

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tiredness

tireless

from

work

. In conclusion,

although

encouraging

teenager

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the teenager

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to do

the

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a

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part

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part-time

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time

job seems to have some benefit to them, I do

believed

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that student's

prority

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priority

duty

is

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is to study

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study

.