Some people believe that the best way to control accidents on city streets is to lower the speed limit but others think there are more important issues that need attention before roads can be safe. Discuss both sides and provide your opinion.

Nowadays,
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population. Some people think that
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limit. Whereas,
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other things as well. I will discuss both points in my upcoming paragraphs: On the
first
hand, high speed is the crucial reason for the mishap on the streets.
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to go somewhere and they do not follow the traffic rules as well as they cross the limits during driving.
For instance
, if the road limit has been 60 km/hr but driver across that road with the limit of 90 km/hr due to many
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On the other hand
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hazard on city roads
such
as driving under influence.
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, some humans drive their vehicles during intake of high
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number of
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cause of coincidence.
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accidents
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driving so Governments should apply
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more safety rules and people should more knowledge about
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individuals feel
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • correlation
  • severity
  • fatalities
  • psychological effect
  • complexity
  • road design
  • pedestrians
  • mobile devices
  • infrastructure
  • crosswalks
  • bike lanes
  • public awareness campaigns
  • comprehensive approach
  • urban environments
  • speed cameras
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