A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

Tourism
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The tourism
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industry has been flourishing since
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decad
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, and it has
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the main income sector for numerous nations.
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travelling provides monetary benefits and
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job opportunities in host countries yet the problems like pollution associated with it can not be ignored.
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, I believe that the overall impact of tourism is positive.
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with, the financial value of tourism is incredible for some small nations.
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, there
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some part of
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the globe
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where the main income source is
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sectorThe
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travellers create
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an inflow
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of money
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with, increasing tourists numbers are reducing unemployment in many nations.
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, the demand
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employees
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the service
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industry which includes restaurants, airports, cafes and so on to
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accommodate
the higher number of customers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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