More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to work. What will be the consequence of this? What solution can you offer?
The plural verb are does not appear to agree with the singular subject peasant. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.
The pronoun their may be unnecessary. Consider removing it.
The noun phrase laborer seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.
The spelling of laborer is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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