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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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Currently, people hold diverse perspectives regarding living place: one thinks that a house is much more convenient than
apartment
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an apartment
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, while others tend to believe vice versa. Personally, I consider
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 of living in a house,
such
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 as lack of
security
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, outweigh its benefits.
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 with, if human beings chose
living
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to live
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 in a detached area, they frequently would not be familiar with problems with
security
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, which is one of its vital disadvantages.
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, in
such
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 districts, people do have
an
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only
option
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one option
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 – locks, which might be insecure in case of robbery.
In contrast
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, a block of flats is fully supported by appliances as cameras and
security
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 guards, which makes apartments much safer than
houses
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. Certainly, these facilities could have been used for
houses
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 either, but rarely do residents pay extra money for
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 type of
splendor
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splendour
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;
moreover
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, these districts are often remote
that
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which
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 complicates
work
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the work
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 of
security
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 companies to prevent robberies. On contrary,
houses
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 surely have their own advantages.
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, they may be spacious enough for families, since it might have one-to-two storeys with multiple living spaces.
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, most of
such
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houses
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 have
its
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their
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 own yard, which is helpful in terms of outdoor noise – the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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 would not be filled with sources of noise. Opposingly, apartments do not provide much privacy as
houses
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 do due to
closer
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the closer
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 proximity of flats and smaller space of
residential
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the residential
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 complex. In conclusion, despite the advantages of living in a detached house,
the
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apply
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factors, as
security
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 and remoteness, play a crucial role in
favor
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favour
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 of
concept
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the concept
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 of living in a tower block.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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