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Some people prefer activities and lifestyle in hot climate while others prefer activities and lifestyle in cold climate. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are various
activities
 and
lifestyles
 in different
climate
 nowadays. Some
people
 prefer hot
weather
 while others prefer cold. It is a tendency that
activities
 and
lifestyles
 in
people
 are individual preferences.
However
, the
activities
 and
lifestyles
 in each
places
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place
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are depend
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depend
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 on the
climate
 in
that
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those
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regions
 as well. According to
this
 point of view, the
activities
 and
lifestyles
 of
people
 in each
regions
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region
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are quite vary
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 because it needs to adapt
with
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to
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 the
climate
on
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in
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that
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those
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places
.
For example
, the benefits of hot
climate
regions
 can offer
people
to
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swimming or
sun bathing
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sunbathing
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. Warming air can lead to the tropical forest and it can be sources of the local plants and vegetables
on
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in
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that
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regions
 for local
people
 to consume it as well.
On the other hand
,
people
 who live in the cold
weather
 have
activities
 and
lifestyles
 in
an opposite ways
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opposite ways
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.
For instance
, they couldn’t go swim in outdoor pools unlike
people
 who live in hot
weather
 but they can play the snowboards in the winter or do some exclusive hike in the snow mountains. Their eating
lifestyles
 are changes by the
weather
 due to the different crops in each
seasons
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season
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 as well.
However
, the advance globalization has led to
the
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convenience
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ofconvenience
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 travelling.
People
 can visit any
places
 around the world.
This
 can bring
people
 who live in
hot
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a hot
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climate
 to experiences
the
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activities
 in
the
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cold
climate
places
 easier than
the
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 past. The same ways as the cold
climate
 dwellers. In conclusion, there are different
activities
 and
lifestyles
 between hot
climate
 and cold
climate
regions
. In my personal experiences, I lived in the hot
climate
 and cold
climate
regions
 so I would rather enjoy the
activities
 in hot
weather
 than the cold
weather
.
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